Review this copy / Landing page

[Andy Poker.Vg]

http://www.poker.vg/forums/pokerstars.php

All criticism appreciated, i am not a copywriter or a designers but from my past affiliate marketing experience i have made a few landing pages.

What do you think of my first attempt.

[MasterSparky]

I have to say. This is one of the more impressive pages I've seen out of a newb Great job.

[punchtheclock]

I like it. I'm assuming you know that the main body should probably get shifted down and to the left significantly.

[Back In Black]

fyi - Your layout becomes extremely out of whack if the browser window is too small.

[punchtheclock]

Originally Posted by Back In Black

fyi - Your layout becomes extremely out of whack if the browser window is too small.

I wen't back to look again and I agree, it only looks messed up when the window is small...this is all I saw earlier when I commented.

Same problem in Firefox and Safari. Looks great when everything is properly aligned though.

[corpfan1]

Looks great.

I just hate stretch pages...like static ones.

Also, you have free $35 bonus at the bottom.

But does look nice.

[TEENPATTINEWS]

Originally Posted by Andy Poker.Vg

http://www.poker.vg/forums/pokerstars.php

All criticism appreciated, i am not a copywriter or a designers but from my past affiliate marketing experience i have made a few landing pages.

What do you think of my first attempt.

Dear Andy,

Fair enough review, honestly done from your perspective and experience on Pokerstars.

However, I felt a few things sort of missing.

Generally, any landing page for conversion has to keep the visitor glued to the page to make them read to the end where they finally sell the product in terms of affiliate marketing of any product. The page has many points in between trying to make the visitor click on the link to the product merchant page for a sale.

I personally find that something a bit lacking in this. I did read till end since I also play on Pokerstars and wanted to know your opinion and experience there.

But for a new person landing through search engines on your site who is searching for poker information after watching WSOP on TV it might be too taxing to read till end.

I might be wrong but I was just trying to be honest.

Unfortunately, You cannot split test a poker review on your site like you can do for affiliate marketing through different campaigns and different landing pages to find the best converting one...

Other block to knowing this is the fact we cannot us the PPC traffic from search engines to send quick and fast targeted traffic to Poker sites.

I also noticed the 35 Dollar Free Bonus mentioned at the bottom. Kindly correct it as for any landing page to convert it should not have contradictory figures in different places.

Another thing I found missing is the lack of Menu item titled "Poker Room Reviews" in your Top Menu.

Just my 2 Cents..

Thanks and Regards,
Raj
Affiliates---.com < Launching soon to service affiliates>

[Andy Poker.Vg]

yeah, im gonna update all the errors. I think this format is a little better: http://www.poker.vg/forums/titan-poker.php

[J S]

solid design. i would make your text links blue.

looks like you're doing all that from within vbulletin? Looks good.

[Randy]

"PokerStars" is the name of the company and should be capitalized appropriately.

"There" indicates a place. "Their" indicates possession.

"Full Tilt" should be capitalized too.

The landing page doesn't read like a sincere review to me; it reads like a poorly written advertisement.

The colors on the page are pretty though.